report-sheets

1. “Pinpoint the Trends of Tablet Market Shares” → “Analyze the Trends in Tablet Market Shares”

   • Reason: “Pinpoint” is not the best verb in this context. “Analyze” is more appropriate for a report.

2. “within the years 2010, 2011 and 2012” → “between the years 2010 and 2012”

   • Reason: “Within the years” is incorrect; “between” is the proper preposition when referring to a range of years.

3. “it’s easier to use and it’s more compact” → “it is easier to use and more compact”

   • Reason: Contractions (“it’s”) should not be used in formal reports. Also, “it is” does not need to be repeated.

4. “you can use it at most places.” → “it can be used in most places.”

   • Reason: More formal and impersonal phrasing is better for reports.

5. “market share was mainly consisting of” → “market share mainly consisted of”

   • Reason: “Was mainly consisting of” is grammatically incorrect. “Mainly consisted of” is the correct past tense form.

6. “Apple had 82% Market Share, Samsung 11% and PC OEMs had 1% the other 6% where shared by unfamiliar brands.”
   → “Apple had 82% market share, Samsung had 11%, and PC OEMs had 1%. The remaining 6% was shared by unfamiliar brands.”

   • Reason: The original sentence has incorrect capitalization, a missing verb, and improper use of “where” (should be “was”).

7. “A year later in 2011 the market share from Apple and Samsung went down to 65% and 8%”
   → “A year later, in 2011, Apple’s market share declined to 65%, and Samsung’s decreased to 8%.”

   • Reason: “Market share from Apple and Samsung” is awkward. “Declined” and “decreased” are better verbs for data trends.

8. “The only brand that didn’t change was Nokia, still sharing 0% of the market.”
   → “The only brand that did not change was Nokia, which continued to have 0% market share.”

   • Reason: “Didn’t” should be changed to “did not” for formality. “Sharing 0% of the market” is awkward; “continued to have 0% market share” is clearer.

9. “In 2012 Apple shrunk by 8%” → “In 2012, Apple’s market share decreased by 8%”

   • Reason: “Shrunk” is informal; “decreased” is more appropriate for a report.

10. “Overall, the tiny brands increased in market share.” → “Overall, smaller brands gained market share.”

• Reason: “Tiny brands” is too informal; “smaller brands” is more professional. “Gained market share” is more precise.

11. “it would be the best to focus on Apple and Samsung” → “it would be best to focus on Apple and Samsung”

    • Reason: “The best” is incorrect here; “best” alone fits better.

12. “as the market share of rather smaller brands might rise over the years.”
    → “as the market share of smaller brands may increase over time.”

    • Reason: “Rather smaller brands” is unnatural. “May increase over time” is more formal and clear.

13. “tables” → “tablets”

• Original: “The main reason why people prefer tables to PCs and laptops…”
• Correction: “The main reason why people prefer tablets to PCs and laptops…”
• Reason: “Tables” is incorrect; the intended word is “tablets.”

2. “Tables have also a longer battery life than laptops.” → “Tablets also have a longer battery life than laptops.”

   • Reason: Incorrect word order; “also” should come before “have” for proper sentence structure.

3. “percent” → ”% (for consistency)

   • Original: “82 percent of customers bought Apple tablets and 11 percent bought Samsung tablets.”
   • Correction: “82% of customers bought Apple tablets and 11% bought Samsung tablets.”
   • Reason: While “percent” is not necessarily wrong, using ”%” is more consistent with numerical data presentation in reports.

4. “To have a variety of tablets is important” → “Having a variety of tablets is important”

   • Reason: The original phrase is grammatically awkward. Using a gerund (“Having”) makes the sentence more natural.

5. “its good” → “it is good”

   • Original: “…so its good to have other cheaper brands in stock.”
   • Correction: “…so it is good to have other, cheaper brands in stock.”
   • Reason: “its” (possessive) should be “it is” (contraction not used in formal reports).

6. “prices classes” → “price classes”

   • Original: “…so its important to have a variety of tablets.”
   • Correction: “…so it is important to have a variety of tablets.”
   • Reason: “prices classes” is incorrect; “price classes” is the correct term. Also, “its” should be changed to “it is” for formality.